Bleeding Blood

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    a life in ashes

    a life in ashes mercury summer

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    Bleeding Blood

    These words tell a story,
    That her picture will not change,
    With my blackened heart,
    There's hope amongst the pain,
    This love's like a drug,
    It hurts but I want more,
    This poetry, this world I know is cold,
    An endless cycle of nothing and blood,

    Bleed tonight,
    The poison's on her lips,

    Silence is perfect for you,
    Choking on my words,
    I'm drowning and can only hurt myself.


    ...thoughts please...
     
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    heshboy

    heshboy Well-Known Member

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    I likes a lot. But too short imo.
     
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    Linja

    Linja Good. Be magnanimous. Über Member

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    This is beautiful, in my opinion it doesn't need to be any longer.
     
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    heshboy

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    Oh yeah... Your face is teh beatiful XD The poem just looks short, but it is great stuff. :)
     
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    Linja

    Linja Good. Be magnanimous. Über Member

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    Where'd that come from? And thank you, I think. :lol:
     
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    Joe

    Joe It's all the same to me LPA Administrator

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    :lol: I was thinking the same thing.
     
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    heshboy

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    I was just being witty you know...Like all the cool kids
     

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