Forsaken

Discussion in 'Your Projects' started by LornVourkolakas, Oct 14, 2003.

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    LornVourkolakas

    LornVourkolakas About To Blow Chunks

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    I'm just showing it around to see what people think of it. So.. tell me what you think. Bad or good. I would like to improve on my writing.

    Sitting in such darkness to which no light may enter
    Watching such words pass me by as tears fall from my eyes
    I see her as I close my eyes and fade away from the eyes of others
    I no longer am here
    For how can something exist when no one sees such a thing
    I speak and my words just fall into a empty well to which not even echos are heard
    I try to exist but fail as everyone speaks and no words fall onto me
    So here I am
    In a world of my own
    Seeing her still as I close my eyes
    I speak softly in riddles, wishing such words would be heard
    But as I speak he runs to my words and erases them just as they come close
    I now seek the sky for answers as I watch such wonders pass me by
    Now my eyes bleed with such pain as I fall deep into sorrow
    Why must I keep failing?
    Why must my words be erasen?
    Why must I ask so many questions and no answers be told?
    And still I sit in such darkness to which no light may enter
     
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    Jamie

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    thats good


    and it should be erased not erasen
     
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    LornVourkolakas

    LornVourkolakas About To Blow Chunks

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    Thanks... Too lazy... to... edit... word.... lol.. Let everyone know my bad English. ;)
     

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