Glass Castles (verse for remix)

Discussion in 'Your Projects' started by EastGhost, Oct 18, 2012.

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    EastGhost

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    Dream big is what I read in the newspaper
    I feel like a window on the outside of a skyscraper
    I'm just a dreamer, peering off into the skylines
    Wondering if existence is even worth my time
    Can I just pass by through the empty space and time?
    And set free from this tragedy, and chase what's mine?
    No / Go figure, i'm following life's pre-destined scripture
    I'm just a small pixel within the bigger picture
     
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    Casual D

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    Not bad. I'd recommend digging even deeper, and making sure you've utilized the best metaphors you can think of. The last metaphor is the standout line of the verse.
     
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    Not bad it could pay off if the artist is ready to put out. I like the lyrics, are you gonna record it? If yes get that red bull and go crazy.
     

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