My song of summer

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    Adam

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    A turned on street light
    But its to bright to be midnight
    Its nine PM
    But it seems like noon
    Its nine PM
    Its to bright
    The night came too soon

    Playing football in the park
    Skating up a half pipe
    Listening to all the dogs bark

    SUMMER
    I can remember the heat
    SUMMER
    Smiles so sweet
    SUMMER
    MY SONG OF SUMMER

    But its time to leave
    Venture into the autum breeze
    Summer ended
    And we'll all fade away
    Summer ended
    We will all hibernate

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    Only took 2 seconds but enjoy ^_^
     
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    Glenn

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    It's good....but I think you need to work on it some more. You need to make the verses flow more. U get what I mean?
     
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    Adam

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    I know what you meen


    Its a bit crap because me and a mate just threw down a few lines and I just posted 'em without any editing so It needs A LOT of work
    Remember though this is a short poem not a song ^_^
     

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