Never Again

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    Anya

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    I like this one.. Please review. :)

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    -Never Again-

    all the things i've said in done
    written in my past
    these words encripted in my mind
    for as long as it should last

    I'm never right
    I'm never wrong
    I'm never weak
    I'm never strong

    all I know is that i'm sorry
    and i'll never do it again

    I can't be trusted anymore
    for what I done was wrong
    I know
    I know
    I know i'm awful
    but my love for you is strong

    forever it shall stay
    buried within my heart forever
    I need you here-
    to understand
    that I can't hate you, never

    I can't live anymore
    I can't breathe anymore
    I just can't live with this guilt anymore

    I can't understand why I cry anymore
    but I can keep in my heart knowing
    that I won't have you anymore

    I know i'm right
    I know i'm wrong
    I know i'm weak
    I know i'm strong

    all I know is that i'm sorry
    and I will never do it again
     
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    Mr. Benzedrine

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    Anya, It is almost as beautiful as you :wub: lol

    But Honestly (Not that i wasnt being Honest) its brilliant keep writing your really good!.

    Here's my favourite bit

    All the things i've said in done
    Written in my past
    These words encripted in my mind
    For as long as it should last.

    Amazing opening Line
     
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    Thanks very much. I like it too. :)
     
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    I like how your lyrics are raw and show signs of vunerability. Dunno if this was based off of a real experience but it seems like you are showing a weakness for a lost love and it really hits the heart nicely.
     
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    Awesome Poem Anya! :p
     
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    Actually, to be honest, it's about my best friend. We happen to be in a huge fight right now and it's sort of an apology song I made just for her. This is the biggest fight weve ever had and it's all my fault because of it.

    I know it sounds like it's for someone I love or somthing, but in a way I guess, yes it is. For my my best friend of course. But it's nice to see everyones views on what they think it's about so don't worry. Whatever you think it is what it's about. :D
     
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    Actually, to be honest, it's about my best friend. We happen to be in a huge fight right now and it's sort of an apology song I made just for her. This is the biggest fight weve ever had and it's all my fault because of it.

    I know it sounds like it's for someone I love or somthing, but in a way I guess, yes it is. For my my best friend of course. But it's nice to see everyones views on what they think it's about so don't worry. Whatever you think it is what it's about. :D [/b][/quote]
    Yes I definetely feel the overwhelming sense of regret in this song. Nicely done. :)
     
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    Well i'm glad it worked out nicely then, thankyou. ;)

    Anymore comments? :)
     
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    That's great, Anya. I love it.
     

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