<div align=center>Jilted Lovers With Broken Hearts Written and Copyrighted by Derek Oswald © 2005 There she is, as I see her, so distant and unattainable, In a world where I find true love impossible to believe, The unacquired dream that I always find I'm incapable, Of surviving a moment without like the air that I breathe, As I feel my knees buckle and I offer myself as her prey, I surrender my freedoms so that she can push me away, Sometimes I wonder as to how I could repeat this mistake, When she keeps ripping me apart till I've had all that I can take... So I.. Reinvent my exit for what I swear to be the final time, Forgetting all that we had, without an apology or goodbye, Nevermind the promises I had offered back in the start, For I don't want to be another jilted lover with a broken heart.</div>
Hey, I had never seen you around before. (cuz i'm kinda new lol). This is great, I don't know if you've been writing for a long time, but this is not bad at all. Its an experience we all may have and a feeling we all may feel at a certain point of our lives. I believe many people would feel identified with your poem. It kind of says a lot with few and simple words. you did a very good job. i liked it!!!
Yer great stuff, we havn't had allot about love lately and i agree that true love doen't seem to exist as much any more. it is a good poem to me cause i find it easy to relate to. Good to finally see you in htis part of the forum Derek.
Coool,the past few days there ha been a sudden influx of poems with different topics,and more importantly by many different poeple,I really liked the poem,great write keep it up,keep posting.
Aww, Derek. :hugz: That's great. I can pretty much guess what/who this is written about. *sigh* Just give it time. Your poem is absolutely great, your flow is astounding and the rythm is really good. Definately one of the best poems I've read here.
It reminds me ALOT of Slipknots Vermillion, Maybe because it uses alot of the same words..But otherwise its ok
It uses ONE word from the whole song, and I don't even think thats the word they used. Doesnt he say "unrequited dream"? I say unacquirred. I just knew people were gonna compare it to Vermilion because of it's feel. But furthermore, some of you people believe this my first poem. Hardly. I've posted a lot of meaningful stuff here in the past. I'd post links but that breaks rules on necroposting so who knows. Maybe we can make the policy different on writings. And yes in.the.shadows, its about that. Btw sparkling..you said you've never really seen me around before, but wasn't it you who asked if I had a girlfriend in the one Newbie Camp thread? Asking out strangers now are we?
well yeah, it was me, but i was just kidding (i hope i didnt hurt your feelings lol) i meant on the writers cove, but that's just kinda normal, cuz i don't really have a lot of time posting here. and you know what? about the necroposting rule, i believe its a good idea to break that at least for writers cove
well yeah, it was me, but i was just kidding (i hope i didnt hurt your feelings lol) i meant on the writers cove, but that's just kinda normal, cuz i don't really have a lot of time posting here. and you know what? about the necroposting rule, i believe its a good idea to break that at least for writers cove [/b][/quote] Well if you saw my pic maybe you'd change your mind . ...shit that was conceited. *Shoots myself*