We Are Still Inside You

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    a life in ashes

    a life in ashes mercury summer

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    We Are Still Inside You


    Freaks of nature,
    We now stand united,
    Your game won’t stand,
    We won’t play this time,
    The wounds aren’t healed,
    The time’s still running out,

    We are the darkness,
    We are the hurt,
    We are the numb,
    We are still inside here,

    The Armageddon,
    We rot in this hole,
    Pick us apart again,
    We don’t give up,
    The waves come crashing down,
    The life still exists,

    We are the darkness,
    We are the hurt,
    We are the numb,
    We are still inside here,

    We are…gone,
    We are…here,
    We are…there,
    We are…you,

    We are the darkness,
    We are the hurt,
    We are the numb,
    We are still inside here,
    We exist inside of you,
    Our purpose is to kill,
    We are the darkness,
    We are the hurt,
    We are the numb,
    We are still inside you.


    thoughts please....
     
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    D_A_V_I_D

    D_A_V_I_D Pure Pwnage

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    Hmmmmmm :hmm:

    Welll :hmm:

    I say.........

    It is damn good.
    I like it, it is different and wiered. There isn't much explanation to what is going on. Lets your mind wander a bit. It is different in the way, it is very harsh. The way things are said, no pretty words, it is blunt and to the point.

    I really like it, it is wierd and different. A bit shot once you take away repeats i really like it the way it is but i think another good poem could be made out of it if it was extended. The only problem with that is it would take away from the feel of this one. In other words. It could have been put together differently but i'd keep it the way it is.

    Good Job ;)
     
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    a life in ashes

    a life in ashes mercury summer

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    thanks, i didn't actually have an aim to the lyrics when i wrote this, it started out as a piece of free hand. remember kids never let the human mind wander or you get something like this....
     

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