Almost Happy Step on the insect life, I'll erase you, Make all the darkness hide, I'll erase you, You couldn't understand me, I'll erase you, Nothing will set me free, I'll erase you, Close enough to taste the fear, I'll erase you, I'm nothing almost Happy, I'm gone almost Happy, I'm nothing almost Happy, I'm gone almost Happy, Clean all the jagged parts, I'll erase you, Make something stick to your heart, I'll erase you, The plague of the bucolic, I'll erase you, Making my sickness so ironic, I'll erase you, Who needs the love, I'll erase you, I'm nothing almost Happy, I'm gone almost Happy, I'm nothing almost Happy, I'm gone almost Happy, I'm nothing almost Happy, I'm gone almost Happy, I'm nothing almost Happy, I'm gone almost Happy, Never happy, Never happy. thoughts please...
I like it but i find the "Ill erase you" too repetative for me. If i read it with only reading the I'll erase you right at the end of the verses that contain it i found that i liked it muc better. Other than that, i liked the overall feel and mesage in this poem. Good work. keep it up.
the i'll erase you's are repeated, because the original idea for this song came from NIN-Mr. Self-Destruct, which repeats the words "and I control you"