Migration Born naked, and dying the same, What do we strive for in this game? The beginning is hopeless as the end, Birth unsure, death necessary, rebirth a trend. The minutes echo back as I breathe, I loosen up as my heartbeats cease, Quite contradictory to another new soul, Fresh falling into a new life, whole. It breathes first, I breathe last, It is the future and I’m the past. Grown once finally to feel the same way, Just like I did, till I die today. I choke aghast, waiting for my Call, Nine months have I been waiting for my fall. Nine months has found anew my soul, In a fresher shape and a new mould. A bolt of pain shoots through my inside, And before I realize, I’ve finally died. But this isn’t where the tale ends, Another Body left to conquer life’s bends. Another mind boggled about the lies, Watching and learning how to fly. It’ll go through all the happiness and pain, My soul forced to live it all again. It’ll encounter the same mistakes, Meet and match friends and fakes. It’ll taste once more the dampened sorrow, It’ll live, like me, to see tomorrow. But then once more I shall return someday, Back on this bed, which I look upon today. Floating in the air once more, I search again for a fleshy, growing, new core. But till then be torn apart, Between one’s new body and one’s old heart. I’m the dice for the game played so clever, I’m in you, leaving soon, forever. i personally have never written on anything like this before, so it needs your comments desperately.....thanks people!
that's one strong word lpsk8er, thanks. but i expected better replies for this piece. :wth: ..well, maybe next time...i guess it was too long...
i have to eco lpsk8er's reply...wow! i think i would have to say that this is surly your best one so far. it's flow was really smooth and the lenth is just right. it shows how much work into this one. it's great! i am curious to how long this one took to write?
gee thanks, fallenangel. well, the first few lines i had written on this one day, when my hands were itching to write, but everything i wrote sounded wrong. so i kept it for this other time when i actually had completed it.i would have taken about twenty minutes to twenty five minutes at the most. thanks for asking...you guys rock!
I must agree with fallenangel that this is one of your best. It is just absolutetly fantastic, one of those poems you can only write once ever so often by pure chance. This is really amazing and i really understand the point you are getting across. Great work.