The Lonely Side Of Me

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    El Muerto

    El Muerto LPA Super Member LPA Super Member

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    The Lonely Side Of Me

    I won’t hit the bottom
    As long as there is
    More to fall
    I won’t see the outside
    As long as I can’t
    Break these walls

    Cause behind all this
    There’s a world that I don’t know
    So much I have missed
    But I don’t want to miss any more

    There’s a place in me
    That you didn’t see
    That you didn’t see at all
    Because you’ve never seen
    The lonely side of me
    The lonely side of me

    I won’t have a future
    As long as I am
    Chained to past
    I won’t know the answers
    As long as I don’t
    Ask myself

    Cause behind all this
    There’s a world that I don’t know
    So much I have missed
    But I don’t want to miss any more

    There’s a place in me
    That you didn’t see
    That you didn’t see at all
    Because you’ve never seen
    The lonely side of me
    The lonely side of me

    There’s a place in me
    That you didn’t see
    That you didn’t see at all
    You didn’t want to see
    The lonely side of me
    The lonely side of me
     
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    D_A_V_I_D

    D_A_V_I_D Pure Pwnage

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    I found this one too repetative, and some lines seemed to short and subtle for a poem that should seem a little....gentler in my mind, good job, but not your best.
     
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    El Muerto

    El Muerto LPA Super Member LPA Super Member

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    It's not a poem. It's a song. Or precisely lyrics for a song.

    Thanks for the comment B)
     

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