Music

Discussion in 'Your Projects' started by heshboy, Sep 29, 2005.

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    heshboy

    heshboy Well-Known Member

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    Very fun to do.

    Music makes me feel alive
    I sing this song just to see you smile
    It makes happier every time I try
    Music travels everywhere
    Just look around the corner and there it is
    Lets here it sing soft or loud
    It doesn’t matter cause you'll be proud

    From the top of my head and through my ears
    It goes around and rings in vain
    I try so hard every night
    Writing songs forevery ear to hear
    It’s so hard
    It drives me so far

    Lets make music together for everyone
    Pen in hand and mind in thought
    I'll feel that empty place in your heart
    With music feeling every inch of your body
    It’s medicine that heals in extra ordinary ways
    I feel better if I write something great
    For you to dance to on your first date

    From the top of my head and through my ears
    It goes around and rings in vain
    I try so hard every night
    Writing songs forever ear to hear
    It’s so hard
    It drives me so far
     
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    D_A_V_I_D

    D_A_V_I_D Pure Pwnage

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    Lyrically this is much better than previous attempts though it felt to shallow for me, the third verse was quite good, but overall, i didn't find anything spectacualr in this poem, but it was an improvement ;)
     
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    Arhaz

    Arhaz ...waiting. LPA Super Member

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    it's pretty okay. ^_^
     

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