Amnesia. Walking away from home, I can feel your cold breath guide down my neck, I’m walking right into amnesia, for a second doesn’t seem harder to forget. I can forget the sense of betrayal, the locking up and trying to starve, It’s easier to lose the hope of being cared for, when the falsehood is clearly carved. It’s harder to redeem my self denial, and when reborn harder to lose, It’s vain and desperate of me to try, when I really don’t have to choose. Bricks and broken walls, torn buildings that once used to stand tall, A hand that helplessly begged crushed by fate, now with a voice upon me calls. An echo in the dry dusty streets, reminds me of nothing, no love or hate, I can’t seem to recollect my fate, my fury, my vulnerability, this tragic date. Call upon my lost cell, a monk of my dreams, a sage who could cure, Drop upon me back my memories, however fatal, I must procure, I should endure.
and now i announce that i'm not allergic to cyber hugs ... c'mon patrons, readers...you can do better than just one reply..?
The forum seems to be moving slow, but here I am to give you another reply. I LOVES IT!! I like your use of words, it's so nice
As i see myself standing alone i feel so lonely and steady and blown i cant think of anything its not my fault please dont blame me i didnt realize it dont hate me look ill rather cut myself and make myself bleeed then seeing you suffer through my own things i know it was bad which i wish i never had but now i see how many experiences have changed me its hard to keep up you got to understand i feel like im traped inside and cant stand up its too much to carry inside of my head as i used to remmember many memories as i blead running blood causes nothing but once you realize its just as easy as asking yourself y? yes its strange its hard to try try to give up and im so afraid of it you got to give me a chance as i bearly, weakend, stand i slowly raise my head to ive u a glance baby i made this for you only when i wrote this i felt so lonely i cant understand many things in the world my back of my head right now feels like it twirl but i just want you to know i will always prefer you than other girls yes this is like hell but what expresses me is how i tell as i tell you these things sometimes i wouldn't dare to tell it in another time i already feel like trapped in a cage as i write with pencil halfway as i erase some mistakes while i was writing this but i just want you to know how much i will always love you and yes i know you also love me too but its mostly for me to tell you THAT I WOULD ALWAYS LOVE YOU
Good poem, but you should find yourself another thread, mate. Much thanks heshboy [/b][/quote] I think it was aimed at you. Good work anyway, made some great use of rhyming the words too.
I think it was aimed at you. [/b][/quote] WTF?...*kills you* I would really appreciate it if i could get comments on my poems.... aaah, that sure felt good...