To Have Nothing

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    esaul17

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    To Have Nothing

    The sun shines down onto the cement
    Oblivious to the days and nights and what they could have meant
    Dark clouds move in but they can’t shroud the world
    On the street stands at figure, I think it’s a girl
    The light is absorbed but doesn’t warm her face
    Covered is shadow, a deathly embrace
    Wherever I go I can’t forget her presence
    A shadow in my heart, such omnipresence
    I reach out and touch her, but like the light
    All warmth is absorbed, lyrical frostbite
    Numbing my body, suddenly enchanted
    Freezing my mind, my heart transplanted
    Can’t pull away, centripetal force
    A certain gravity and you are the source
    Impossible to escape, not that I want to
    My love is a ghost that can’t help but haunt you
    But when the sun goes down and the clouds block the stars
    You illuminate me, shed light on my scars
    My flaws thrown at me, I suffocate
    I breathe in your smile, choke on my fate
    Sunlight returns, UV rays on my skin
    I crave this cancer; it hides what’s within

    To live your life and get nowhere
    Numbers aren’t words
    Numbers don’t care
    I thought I was happy until you were there
    Shown what I can’t have
    The pain I can’t bear

    Genetic manipulation, algebraic vectors
    Projectile motion and Cartesian plane sectors
    So complex, so beautifully simple now
    The fourth dimension passes faster than I’d allow
    Time acceleration and you are the catalyst
    I want you- no proofs need establish this
    Brain waves change medium; conservation of energy
    Of thoughts and words, the latter are the enemy
    These memories of you won’t let me be
    Pulling me along this downward trajectory
    But thoughts are not real, have no physical manifestation
    I keep them prisoner, trapped in my imagination
    Mental jailbreaks exist in the form of dreams
    A psychological escape would rip me at my seems
    Vocal supernovas, the product of my frustration
    Devoured in a black hole of my own creation
    If the words escaped then you’d be soon to follow
    So I keep my head full and my heart hollow
    But it matters not; you’ll be gone soon anyways
    The paradox beckons my breath to form a phrase
    But my words would form a sentence, note the dual meaning
    I wouldn’t torture you with a love so demeaning

    http://esaul17.sitesled.com/To Have Nothing.html

    A bit heavy on the vocabulary. Please R & R.
     
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    esaul17

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    Sorry for the double post, but can anyone comment? I changed the middle stanza.
     
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    heshboy

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    It's awesome. For some reason people have decided to skip over peoples things without comment these days. So, I'll comment, and tell you that this was some of the best writing I've seen.





    Oh and I saw this on GameFaqs, and saw your name. I had to check to see if it was the same person, and yet it is. Cool. Have a great day GF pal lol.
     
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    hehe its not as big on vocabulary as you think but thats not a bad point at all... its a really good piece.. you depict your visuals well and its alot different to the other stuff i read here *shifts eyes*
     
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    esaul17

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    Thanks. What is your name of GameFAQS heshboy? And I guess it was a bit large on vocabulary compared to my others poems, but not overall. Thanks a lot for commenting.
     
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    heshboy

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    I'm ss54gohan, but that's my brothers account I'm using to post more until my alt gets out of purg. My main account is ryuisill.

    What boards do you usually go to?

    I usualy stick to the NGG Board :), and a few others.
     
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    esaul17

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    I usually go to Revolution, Twightlight Princess and Final Fantasy VII:AC boads, while occasionally visiting the Anime-Other Titles Board.
     
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    Linja

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    Euh, this comment has nothing to do with any of those games, but;

    The poem was beautiful, you have great talent, and all your works carry a great deal of emotion. Well done. (Maybe you'll get more comments if you actually post the entire poem instead of a link)
     
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    Arhaz

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    it was so...complete...so ..so...whole...
    it was so well carved. it was so... like a tyranny that i'm fallen for.
    it's so fantastic...
     
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    esaul17

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    Thanks lol. Glad you liked it.
     
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    Snail

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    great job as always esaul17.....

    ummmm by the way... no more ff7AC continuations?....
     
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    esaul17

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    I'm hoping to get around to it. THe project isn't dropped just...postponed. Sorry. Next time I have some spare time I'll try to give it a go. Thanks for the comment as well, apreciated as always.
     

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