It all started one day, one quiet night A man walked from work, he felt alright His name was John, but at work he was called J He said nicknames bothered him, but this one was okay He walked into his house, exclaimed that he had come home His kids ran up to him while his wife was on the phone He left the kids unoccupied to hear his wife crying Asked what the matter was, she said she found out that he was lying And so it turned out that all the nights he was gone He had been with another girl, at a hotel near the mall His wife drove away with the belongings and the kids And J just sat there in a lonely home, hating what he did Called up this girl, told her that it was over It was never meant to happen, he screwed up; he wasn’t sober He couldn’t explain it to his wife so she would understand She drove away, his kids slipped right out of his hands All alone, he stayed in his lonely home The room’s empty and cold as he stared at the phone Didn’t have any money to go anywhere or to eat Didn’t have the endurance to live off of the street He didn’t have the will to make ends meet So he sat there starving, in his lonely seat Meanwhile, his wife is at her mother’s home She wouldn’t stop crying, she felt so alone The kids didn’t know what was going on They wanted to be with their dad, but they tried to console their mom She didn’t know what to do, it was all going so fast She had no clue, she thought he had intentions in the past But she still loved him, and thought it was all a mistake Maybe they could fix it, and push the pain back away But something was holding her back, she couldn’t do it She thought it would it be more of a mistake, couldn’t go through with it So she stood there for week, looking down at the street And hoping maybe that soon, he would be calling But she had not heard from him, it had been almost a month The kids were still confused, it was all too much. J couldn’t stand his home, and left it behind Couldn’t let the pictures on the nightstand torture his mind He took all he could and put it in a shopping cart Hoping that maybe somewhere, he’d have a fresh start As he sat on apartment steps, everybody looked his way Seeing him each night wiping his tears away His life had been ruined, and there was nothing he could do He would never see her again, but he really wanted to If only I could go back in time, he said every night with a frown Looking at everybody that walked around He couldn’t even keep warm, he wished he had a jacket to warm him Didn’t even have the thought that somebody could looking for him But his wife miles away was still crying on her bed Her kids trying to ask her what daddy said She said that daddy didn’t love her anymore And that they wouldn’t see daddy no more The kids began to cry, and so did she As J passed out on the side of the street A couple of weeks later, J’s wife got a call From a policeman, who worked right near the mall J had been arrested for murder Now she was scared, she thought that J would hurt her But all she wanted was for him to be okay But when she went to the station, it wasn’t that way It turned out to be worse, when she visited his cell That it was awfully apparent that J was definitely not well He had scars on his face and bruises on his arms She couldn’t do anything, he was a victim to harm He gazed in her eyes, with an urge to say What happened, and how things shouldn’t have gone this way But he just sat there, rugged clothes, scarred face And his wife just stood, wiping her tears away Her kids by her side asking who J was And J just burst into tears because His own kids couldn’t recognize him anymore Now he thought that there was nothing worth living for He began to look away stared at the gun in an officer’s pocket But then something grabbed his attention, his wife’s locket That he gave to her, 3 years ago that night It became clear to him, that nothing was alright His wife stayed, and for the rest of the night They both sat there and continued to cry 5 months later, J was executed J’s wife watched it on TV, had it muted Her kids were watching the execution in another room They were crying, and J’s wife knew that they wouldn’t stop soon She went into the closet, opened a shoebox There were many random things, notes and fur clothes But she emptied it all on the floor, and what dropped Was a gun, that she kept at the bottom, safe and locked She closed the door, locked, turned the TV up full sound She was silent, and as she looked around Found a bullet in her drawer, and looked at it sharply She was holding her tears, but she couldn’t do it hardly For a minute, she started at the TV As her kids knocked on the door, asking for mommy And once the announcer said that J was declared dead She put the bullet in her gun, and put it right in her head - - - I had no particular reason for why I wrote this, but I'd like some comments on it. I know there's some forced rhyming, but I won't bother.
Reminded me of "Spraypaint and Inkpens" on the Fort Minor Mixtape. It was good, don't get me wrong, a few lines really stood out though. Especialy the last one. I really liked it though, told a great story. I wish I could write that well.
OH MY GOD!....THIS WAS A MASTERPIECE...THIS WAS GREAT!i could never write this, ever. it was perfect....nothing wrong. flawless. CONGRATULATIONS!