Seasons Greetings

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    esaul17

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    December comes, the one and only
    Time to celebrate that I’m lonely
    Twenty-first day, year seventeen
    Gazing out at the grey winter scene
    Another coffin nail’s removed from the shelf
    I’m another year further from myself
    Three moons pass that remind me of your face
    Three fields of stars represent your place
    Then the sun comes up and I’m all alone
    Two weeks to make this feel like home
    Just one day until the early rising
    Boxes let rapping paper disguise them
    They say there are things money just can’t buy
    If only, if only they knew how to lie
    Such bright words but I can’t forget
    They are speaking of the gift I’ll never get
    Merry Christmas, the holiday’s haunted
    I got every gift except the one I wanted
    No beating hearts under the Christmas tree
    No loving lips curve to smile for me
    Mocking mistletoe, a poisonous plant
    My imagination does what I can’t
    It would be so easy to walk into the snow
    To embrace the numbness and never let go
    Never let reality melt back in
    Be taken away by the softest sin
    Close my eyes and dismiss desire
    Let ice envelop my internal fire
    And with the final beat of my heart
    I’d let my life fall apart
    But I’m still alive and I know why
    I lack the initiative to live, lack the initiative to die

    This is a poem about December. For those who don't know, seventeenth birthday is december 21st. That explains why the date is mentioned in the song. On the timeline Christmas vacation starts on the 23rd, three days (or moons/starts) later. Then of course, it is one more day until the early rising of Christmas. Just thought I'd let it be known what I was talking about incase it wasn't clear. Comments are appreciated.
     
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    Arhaz

    Arhaz ...waiting. LPA Super Member

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    you have awesome talent mate. great great work. fantastic. and you write ever so often(i suppose) each time capturing me. just mind blowing...
     
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    esaul17

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    Thanks a lot. Love the feedback. Did you think the line I changed was an improvement?
     
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    Arhaz

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    which line?
     
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    You changed a line?

    I liked the end even more than the beginning, because it started to smooth out at the end. You really did great on this.
     
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    esaul17

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    Whops, wrong topic about the line change. Sorry lol.
     
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    Darcy

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    This is absolutely fantastic! I actually enjoyed reading it a lot. You did a great job!
     
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    Linja

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    Hauntingly beautiful. I wish I had such talent.
     
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    esaul17

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    Thanks. And your talent easily surpasses mine.
     

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