Ocean Blue Eyes

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    Luke

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    Ocean Blue Eyes

    I remember those days when it was you and me
    I needed you more than I need the air I breathe
    You were luck for me that I just could not believe
    I’d always see you and think I’d have to snap out of a dream
    I remember those summer days, those winter nights
    Just you and I on the side holdin’ each other tight
    I gotta say, you practically consumed my life
    Cos I could never think about anything else no matter how hard I tried
    But I was a fool to think that it could actually last
    Cos as quick as you came you disappeared in a flash
    And in one straight smash back of one too many’er beer glass
    You fucked up big time and cost me all that I had

    If I could stop the pendulum for just a day
    I’d make you see what you threw away
    But despite all these memories I must confess
    That it seems to me that you couldn’t care less

    Never mind those times of just you and I
    I can’t speak for you so I don’t know why
    You threw it all away without anything to say
    It’s a long way before I forget about those days
    Hell, I’m still trapped in yesterday’s memories
    When I close my eyes its still you I see
    In the mirror its you on my shoulder leaning
    Like you used to do with those blue eyes gleaming
    But god I had no idea it would end like this
    But I guess this ignorance to you is only bliss
    You can go ahead and do your thing
    I’ll just be here in the darkness remembering that tender kiss

    If I could stop the pendulum for just a day
    I’d make you see what you threw away
    But despite all these memories I must confess
    That it seems to me that you couldn’t care less

    Realise just exactly what you were to me
    Or were you blinded by your own beauty?
    Ocean blue is the colour of your eyes
    But black is your heart mixed with bitter lies

    If I could stop the pendulum for just a day
    I’d make you see what you threw away
    But despite all these memories I must confess
    That it seems to me that you couldn’t care less

    Ocean blue eyes
    aka bitch in disguise
     
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    Christopher

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    This is really one of the best things I've ever read on LPA, I guess it's one of your bests too.
    It's perfect I have nothing negative to say about it.
    I really like the way your ryhme but it doesn't seem forced that's how a song or poem is supposed to sound.
    I also like the fact that it begins happy and then slowly change. Both the happy and the sad part are equally good but I especially like the first verse.
    Wish I could write like that.
     
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    a life in ashes

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    ...If I could write poetry this good...

    amazing work as usual, definatley one of your bests.
     
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    Linja

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    Very nice.

    I have nothing else to say except cookie.
     
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    Luke

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    Cookies! yay! :)

    Thanks for the comments everyone :)
     

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