Cold Heart (Poem): When the icy cold takes it out on me I'll shed my skin hoping my wounds won't bleed But my wounds have been driven so deep that even the softest edges seem so sharp I'll let go of the moonlight and slowly sink into dark I'll scream out my inner fears Hoping you know I need you here It's time I realized you're nowhere near You never were... You've left me to myself... ...to myself and my cold heart thoughts plz...
i think it's really good!!! i only write like this when i'm in a deep deep depression.ha... What inspired you to write it or you just felt like it?
Awesome !!! .. Sumtimes short poems convey more meaning than the long n complicated ones...in other words..i like it heaps...
well....when I wrote it I had just broken up with my girlfriend and sorrta thought I'd write how we both might feel (I deffinetly felt that way and also felt bad for hurting her....so I needed to get it off my chest)
I like your other one more, but this isn't bad. It stands out as a bit odd that you say this person both left and was never present in the first place. Things like that aren't uncommon but seem to cause a poem to lack continuity for me. Regardless, it isn't a bad piece. I just thought I'd point that out to you. Also, it's icy, not icey. Just so you know.