My imposter

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    Seinfeld

    Seinfeld We are the nobodies LPA Super Member

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    My imposter:

    I lie...

    I lie to you to get a piece of you killed
    I hide from you to get my feelings stilled
    Running from the fears that you povoke
    Screaming with your hands wrapped around my throat
    The louder I get, the more you tighten your grip
    The longer I live, the further my blood drips

    And I wish,
    I wish I would have lost her
    Yes,
    I wish I would've lost you, my imposter

    I lie...

    I lie to you so you don't ever tell the truth
    The truth would hurt just as much as your abuse
    So I'm jumping off the edge of what we've built
    Diving into these feelings that have been spilt
    The deeper I sink, the higher you are above
    The more I look up, the more you think you're being loved

    And I wish,
    I wish I would have lost her
    Yes,
    I wish I would've lost you, my imposter

    And I wish,
    I wish I would have lost her
    Yes,
    I wish I would've lost you, my imposter

    I lie to you, my imposter
    I'd die for you (to leave), my imposter




    hope someone likes it...'cause I'm really feeling these lyrics >_< :closedeye
     
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    whoneedssubtext?

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    It's decent.
    But every line doesn't have to rhyme perfectly with the next one.
     
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    Seinfeld

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    thanx ^_^....and uhm...not every line rhymes perfectly....or am I wrong? :ermm:
     
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    esaul17

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    Not every line rhymes, but it is a typical AABB rhyme scheme. I liked it though, probably one of your best. Good job. I love the course.
     
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    Seinfeld

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    thank you very muche ^_^ as for the AABB rhyme it's all I ever do....well most of the time I only have 2 or 3 poems/lyrics with some other rhyme type such as ABAB :p
     
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    esaul17

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    Nothing wrong with it IMO.
     

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