City Syndrome

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    Luke

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    Hello everyone, it's been a hell of a long time since I posted anything here so I thought I'd share one of my most recent pieces. I don't know if this will be used in any of the music projects I'm in at the moment but I've got a part for it written on my keyboard so you might see it in the future along with some of my other lyrics I've posted. This piece is titled 'City Syndrome' (and yes I'm aware AM has a song of the same title lol), feel free to comment on it or suggest ways on how it could be improved. Enjoy. :)

    City Syndrome

    Smog and dust and tower lights
    Drain the colour from the sky
    It’s cold outside and traffic’s all to see
    The air’s so thick that it’s hard to breathe
    But walking down this central lane
    We realise that it’s in our veins
    This life that we cannot let go
    The friends and loves we don’t yet know
    Life can’t be any less the same
    When it’s all you know, all else feels strange
    You never want to leave your nest
    Beneath the wing of the metropolis

    The busy life of phantoms
    All locked within a dream
    But satisfaction has no place
    When stains will not come clean
    This is what we want
    Or at least what we’ve been told
    City syndrome’s in the hearts
    Of each and every soul

    Dirt and filth and endless plights
    See the town through different eyes
    A place of god if you could believe
    Look beyond the veil of naivety
    Walking through this central green
    We realise that it’s all a dream
    The promise it brings is just a mask
    The friendships and loves all never last
    Is this a place of destiny?
    Or is it that we can’t break free?
    Cannot ever leave your nest
    Locked in the cage of the metropolis

    The busy life of phantoms
    All locked within a dream
    But satisfaction has no place
    When stains will not come clean
    This is what we want
    Or at least what we’ve been told
    City syndrome’s in the hearts
    Of each and every soul

    Every single soul
    Is reaching out for bliss
    Making oaths with each like them
    To savour every kiss
    Tell them that you love them
    Don’t tell them who you are
    A prisoner just like them
    Beneath the city stars

    The busy life of phantoms
    All locked within a dream
    But satisfaction has no place
    When stains will not come clean
    This is what we want
    Or at least what we’ve been told
    City syndrome’s in the hearts
    Of each and every soul
     
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    Awesome. I really like it.

    The bridge part is my favourite piece.

    One of your best :D
     
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    Luke

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    Cheers Dave. :)
     
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    This is clearly amazing. Have you any music to it? It does remind me of IPS
     
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    That's really good. It would be good to hear it put to music when/if that happens.
     
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    Thanks for the comments guys. :)
     
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    The bridge kills me. I love how this all flows. Long time no see, Luke.

    Just one thing: that 'breath'? Should be 'breathe'.
     
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    Luke

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    The typo has been changed now.

    Thanks for the comments. :)
     

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