i really love this one! the repitition made this flow immensly well. and i have gotta say that this what i feel on so many occations so to be...
as lyrics i think this works. whould be good to hear with some heavy metal kind of sound. is this what your planning to sing it to?
this kicks some serious ass! this lines totally did it for me... amazing! ;)
Angels and demons To call upon the angels that serve God To gather up strength just to survive I give thee my undying devotion If only an...
fantastic work there freakolp! this flowed immensly well and was just so well written. how do you do it? i love your writings and you obviously...
truely amazing! to produce something so beautiful but dark and sick at the same time takes immense talent! wonderful, just wonderful...
wow, now this is amazing! i think this is one of the best pieces of work you have done! you must have had some mindset to write this... amazing...
now that was fantasitic! much more focused and that made it a really, really great piece of writing! you are obviously very talented and i am...
yeah, one more stanza would give it a great kick at the end but other than that, it was fab! a bit sad, but a fab write!
i totally agree with david! for your very first attempt, this is amazing! my first attempt was sooo bad compared to this. hell, you better...
REALLY! :embarassed: that's so damm sweet! i am working on some more stuff. stay tuned! arT saveS thank you too. really glad you liked it! i...
i like it! real nice
well you've achieved it being catchy! it's really good! would love to hear it with music!
i like this. it flowed really well but i have to say that i felt the rhyming was alittle too forced. but other than that, i thought it was good.
i have to agree with david. the re-write is so much better! it's quite a good piece of writing and writen really well. can't wait to see what...
i think you have great vision and that can make a person into a great writer. however, you have to be more focused in a subject matter to make...
i thought this last bit has potential. but other than that, i have to agree with the others. however, it's very brave of you to right about...
i thought this was good too. these bit, i thought, were really good...
i really like this but i think it would sound fantastic as a good, hard rocking song! it's a great write and i would love to see more of your stuff.