wow, different! really don't know how i feel about this one cause it's abit twisted. but i guess that's what your going for. ;) i think i like...
oh my GOD! i crapped myself!
sorry i haven't replied earlier but i haven't had that much time to go online! but thanks all you guys for the comments. i wasn't totally happy...
The watcher As I stand at the top of the stairs I look down to see your face You were the one who caused all that grief and in me all I felt was...
again, this is really good! however, made me weepy again...(but thats good!)
wow, this was really good! i love these lines! did make me alittle weepy though... :'(
thought this was pretty good! really liked this bit...
great work man! it's much simplier than most of your other stuff but it says exactly what you want to say! i really like it and i have to say...
sometimes an impluse can produce the best poetry (ususaly does with mine!) this is good, well writen and a fab concept! looking at the world of...
again, another fab poem! like the others said, your work has gotten so good lately. keep it up!
again a really good poem. i really enjoy reading your stuff. good work! ;)
i love this one! it's a nice message in it and it flowed extremly well. almost brought a tear to my eye and your words have never been truer......
i agree with david, one more verse and it would be perfect! this is real good and i really enjoyed this one. well done!
this is pretty good stuff. the rhythm of it was good and it flowed well. i can see how this is a poem that has to br read in between the lines....
this is actually alright but i would be better to hear it as the song with the music. still, i like it!
"don't give a whooping funt!"
this is good david! it's nice to see that other's are trying to experiment with different lengths of poems too cause it's not just the long ones...
very, very well done! this was great! it kept me hooked the whole way through! keep writing, please! :lol:
i really liked the concept of this one! as for making sugestions about future poems? no can do! they have to come from you and only you. poetry...
i have just read your edit and i have to say that i do prefer the second ending more! again, fab work! ;)