Pretty good, The only thing that annoys me is the title is identical to Linkin Park's Carousel. Even though your song probly has more to do with a...
Well done. I felt that some of the verses were to short, not that i don't like short verses just when you have a chorus i feel like i'm reading so...
Gatorade may not turn your insides to "embalming fluid" but it will make you fatter than diet coke will any day. Calories in 100g of:...
Yer the posssible result of an impulse poem, usually not clear, doesn't flow or both, lol. Anyway, thanks everyone, i'd had the idea for a while,...
Recently, i thought all your was great, onther really good piece of work, i thought i had responded to it earlier, oh well. Possibly one of your...
Very nice, i really like it. I like how you started with and, it felt like i was just bursting into the poem like it was a connection to alot of...
I must agree, a very catchy little piece that i think would work well with the right music ;) Keep writing.
I'm shocked :o and appaled :ohno: at such a suggestion, it's just disgraceful. You should be ashamed of yourelf. *cough*mabye a torrent...
Thanks torn rose, i'm glad you've given it the thumbs up. And not all your impulive poems are rough and bad :wth: much. lol :lol: Thanks again,...
Ok, here is my new poem, it was written on a weird impulse that i cannot explain, i just wrote what came into my head. So i don't know what people...
So screwed up.... :chemist:
yer i agree about the word latter, it worked well in this poem. Anyway, great work, interesting. I don't think your best but still very good. Keep...
Another great poem, i really liked this one, and i loved the message in it. Great work. Keep writing. ;)
Good! I personally think it could use with one more verse that would conclude it better, but other than that it's pretty good, keep it up.
Nice work, i found this poem very interesting and different. I liked the way you set it out with repeating the first line in the 4th. It worked...
Woah, very intence write. Good job, i never reallly expected anyone to write about what you just did but, i guess someone now has. Great job.
LOL, i wasn't expecting a comment that strong, but when you as great as me what else can you expect. LOL :lol: . Thanks everyone for your...
Yes, it seems to be a random mix of dark thoughts, but it doesn't destroy the quality of the poem at all. I actually really enjoyed reading this...
I like it, has a very rough tone to it, very angry. I think the edits are pretty good overall. ;) P.S. You said well instead of we'll. Just...
Hmmmm..... Pretty good, i found it a bit to repetative for a poem, but as a song and played with music, which it is, it may work well. So hard to...