Yeah, this board has gone REALLY slowly lately. And I doubt anyone is angry at you from the Rap Battle thread, they all seemed to be in quite good...
Thanks a lot guys. No critisisms?
No problem. It isn't like I have a grudge against you or anything.
Thanks.
You say we’re friends, but then tell me I’m nothing That in your eyes I can’t be something I’ll always be another excuse to get hurt Do you...
Definately better than your other one. Although I'm not so much a fan of the topicality, it was definately better written. And I'm not trying to...
It is a good piece overall, and your use of language strengthens it for the most part. Some lines don't make any sense to me though. Like this:...
Nothing against you man, but I have to agree with in.the.shadows on this one.
I just like to read a pome about SOMETHING worht my time. How cool/how much better than the rest of us you are isn't gonna cut it. Sorry.
Awesome. Thanks Mali or Maranwë or torn rose.
Thanks a lot guys. 4nd 175 0k4y |-|35h80y. Sorry, I had to.
What would you say are some grammatical errors I made?
I didn't mind the opening and it has a bit of good vocabulary and flow, but a large portion of it was just spewing nonsense to me. Like, it seemed...
It's a nice piece. I love the title. The verse is great as so many others have said.
I remember it from the competition as well. Great job.
Yeah. I just hate when I do it to stop someone from being annoyed with me, but acheive the opposite effect. I do it all the time to this one girl...
I'm the same with saying sorry. I actually try to stop, but it just comes out.
Knock, Knock “Knock, knock Who’s there?” So many barricades and defensive mechanisms Kept at bay with self-bound criticisms You say...
Happy Valentine's Day A sheet of snow blankets the world we see A cold exterior covers where I want to be Those icy walls surround your heart...