Exactly, that's what most likely happened, but if he really did have HIV, it could open up alot of possibilities.
That was an awsome read, to tell the truth, i don't know any girls that would play computer games, and though i know they would exist, i'd still...
WORD.......... This is some crazy shit. WTF were they thinking. One more reason to download pirated music. Wow, i didn't believe they could...
WTF :blink: Anyway, thanks for the replies.
I felt it was a bit repettative as the chorus was much longer than the verses, other than that it was great, awsome lyrics, keep it up.
Really touching, i absolutel loved this poem. So powerful and beautiful. Just amazing................. Hope to see more soon.
Great work. Sounds really pollished, no rough edges, great work.
Thanks for the feedback everyone. ^_^
The title is the same as a godsmack song, which for me makes it........ i don't know, it's just annoying when people use titles from songs.........
Thought i'd take a page from mali's book and post my competition poem. It was different for me so i really would like some feedback on it. Punish...
Lol, this was awsome Mali, it's so beautiful and sad at the same time. Just great........... Keep it up......
This one is much better than the other one i read, i really liked this, it flowed great and no forced rhyming, well actualy any hardly rhyming at...
I agree on that unfinished feeling but it's not too bad, a bit short as you seemed to be going for a verse chorus style poem and it finished after...
NIce work hesh. i replied to this before, but the with the change of server my reply was lost. This is some of the best work you've ever done in...
I liked it, but it seemed to be repeating it's self to often, which i didn't like. The lyrics are fairly simple and i've seen much better from you.
Demonoid, I assume? [/b] Can't find it :( WHERE ARE YOU GODAMIT
Awsome work hellflame, il oved it, i have to agree, the title doesn't fit the poem as well as it could but the poem is absolutely amazing. Great work.
I actually liked it, i found the ending a bit too abrupt, though this may have been intentional. It was really intense, i loved it.
Totally awsome, i really loved it, only when rhme i felt was forced and that was rhyming "low" with "hello", hello didn't really sem to fit in my...
i agree, it flows reallly well and the rhyming didn't feel forced. Good job, i really liked it.