Hate of Heaven and Love of Hell… In shackles falls the bride today, in love she pleads her fate, For alone on earth, a man turns blind,...
as mali did, i would like to thank you fot writing this. it makes a difference, such poems and lyrics. bless you, man.
contrary to mali, i think the poem had an unsaid story. it had an underlying background. it had a home, but somewhere in the woods, where someone...
um...i wouldn't critisize it much. i found it a worthy attempt to try and play with words, and it isn't an easy job trying to repeat them. you...
aweomse. very strong for a short song. you could add another verse. but don't listen to me if you feel otherwise. great job, and best of luck man.
it was so...complete...so ..so...whole... it was so well carved. it was so... like a tyranny that i'm fallen for. it's so fantastic...
i love you for your work, and hate you as much for the same...
very strong use of emotion, a great choice of words. i could find no flaw... nothing i could detest. great job!
a bit forced...just a bit. it ended well. i'd give it a 6.7/10
i admire poetry with no story line. something that comes from the heart. something that strikes the reader. and this is one of those. the lines...
it's very cold, and the scene could be understood well, inspite of the short lenght, that's a good thing. but the situation was not all that well...
it's a very rare piece. very different. well written with a good choice of words. i was a bit confused though in the second last stanza. the scene...
it's blurry, but rythmic and catchy. rapped right? the storyline and scenes are a bit vague too.
yappy yirthday yrad!
thanks mate
thanks mate.
much thanks all.
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High. Snatching much and saving you nothing, Illegal doses petrifies your everything, Gone down the hole somewhere in space, Never to...
THANK YOU heshboy! much thanks arT saveS and thanks again Mali... i love you all... *runs*