And I’m In The Wrong Hurt by the things she said, My wounds are bound, Tiny voices in my head, Whisper that I failed her, And I believe, I believe you, And I’m in the wrong, I believe you, And I’m in the wrong, She did the right thing, The virus says I went wrong, Cut your throat and sing, No one likes a liar like me, And I believe, I believe you, And I’m in the wrong, I believe you, And I’m in the wrong, I’m the one who should be dead, I’m the one who’s obsolete, I’m the one no one likes, I’m the one who made the mistakes, Hurt by the things she said, My wounds are bound, The virus says I went wrong, No one likes a liar like me, I believe you, And I’m in the wrong, I believe you, And I’m in the wrong, I believe you, And I’m in the wrong, I’m the one who should be dead, I’m the one who’s obsolete, I’m the one no one likes, I’m the one who made the mistakes. thoughts please....
I thought it was quite good, i didn't think it was your best, but still GREAT work. Keep it up. Keep writing. Try writing something in 3rd person, thats what i want to try next. Like carosel. Have fun kep writing
good idea, i have been trying to do that. but back to the poem, i thought it was good. this bit is soo truthful.