Another love to take down, Another thing to muck around. Another lonely girl in the midst of the night, I know you can take it, just use your might. If you want to know how much I feel, Just come down here and let your legs kneel. To face me, to tell you all that I need, It's something I said, it's true indeed. My thoughts are everywhere but here, My spirit is looking for you, but you're never near. If I had the chance to take by the words I said, It would be like bringing life to the dead. If you had the chance to hate me the rest of time, I would make this last forever, this doubtful rhyme. Hold it close to your heart and never let go, Because I know how you are, too down and low.
i'm sorry but I'm not feeling this one. I found the rhyming to feel a little...forced. Don't take this the wrong way, but I liked your other one more.