Please comment (Just so you don't get the wrong idea: it's not about sex or any kind of relationship...it's about a mother acting like she really cares. I'm just gonna say that much) --------------------------------------------------------- Love me senseless: I can't seem to be rid of this headache, (that is you) Another nightmare, that just can't be true I'd love to get some peace and quiet (Without you) acting like you ever really tried Are you coming closer or are you keeping your distance? I can't tell anymore I guess you've loved me senseless Somewhere beneath the covers I'm hiding (from you) Try to ignore the child inside, crying The covers aren't stained, yet I'm bleeding (It's just you) and the lies, on which I've been feeding Are you coming closer or are you keeping your distance? I can't tell anymore I guess you've loved me senseless Hey, you! Cut the crap! I'm done dealing with head-on attacks! Hey, you! Cut the crap! I'm on my own two feet Try to nurture that!
it's a bit bolty in places. but got a nice rhythm. choice of words are pretty good. credit for writing a good piece without too much complication.