Another poem,an older one of the stuff that I've written and this one is a rhyme free poem ,so hope you understand it and like it. Mistake Every time I committed a mistake you laughed at me wildly as if I had told a joke I was crazy that I laughed with you I don't know if I did it purposely but I never knew what was your purpose you patted me on my back but I never knew you would stab me I never knew you were so mean you were with me in my difficult times but I never knew that you were sitting on my back but in your difficult times you dragged me with you I don't blame you 'coz I am the one at fault I created this problem and let it grow but I had never thought you would grow so big
Pretty good. i feel that it needs one more verse to close it up but this is just my opinion. This line ROCKS man. i love it. a good job. KEEP WRITING
Well done! you truly are full of surprises. you dont always write about the same thing, and that's something I really like. I must say i just love your style. you are really deep and you dont need to rhyme to make your poems sound good and be as powerful as they are now. I really liked this one. Sounds good and i kind of feel identified... Well, as i've said before, you are a very talented writer, please dont u stop writing, i hope to see more of your stuff around. awesome poem man!