Murmering Sweet Nothings

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    Anya

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    Wow, I haven't written in ages. I've missed writing so much.. I suppose this one's okay. It may be a little shabby but it's the best I can do. Please comment. :)

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    Your silence tells me secrets that no one else can hear
    Murmering sweet nothings, plaguing my gentle ears

    Your voice is like a sweet caress tingling over my skin
    Your hands on me and your breathe on my face,
    My love for you a sin.

    My heart drenched in your soul and eyes
    Two green orbs hiding lies
    All of what i'm doing defies,
    What I'm really supposed to be doing..

    I should be tearing you out of my heart
    and leaving the blood to rot on the floor
    I drop my tears of saddness
    and start off where I was before..

    There's nothing you can do to stop me..
    For what else I have in store
     
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    Mr. Benzedrine

    Mr. Benzedrine Rock the 40 Oz

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    Wow, I realllly love that line Anya its so beautiful, You should write more you seem very talented.

    I cant really point out anything thats wrong with it

    9/10..I like it alot.
     
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    Anya

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    Wow, I realllly love that line Anya its so beautiful, You should write more you seem very talented.

    I cant really point out anything thats wrong with it

    9/10..I like it alot. [/b][/quote]
    You think so? I really hope so, I love to write. I just never seem to really find the time to do it. I have alot of other poems, but they're all allready posted, and they're old too.

    If you liked that just go in some of the older threads from a while ago, and I have more there. ;)

    Thankyou though. :blush:
     
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    Muri

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    Yeah,I like it alot too. It's amazing. :)
    I want to write like that too. :p
    Very good. uh. Should I rate? :unsure: 10/10.
     
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    i really like this bit but this bit is by far the best!

    very good use of imagery! i think you should try to write more cause ur obviously good at it.
     
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    Anya

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    Thanks very much. :blush:


    I'll probably write later.
     

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