my first song

Discussion in 'Your Projects' started by withnoapologies, Dec 17, 2003.

  1. #1
    withnoapologies

    withnoapologies Well-Known Member

    Joined:
    Oct 19, 2003
    Messages:
    305
    Likes Received:
    0



    first of all, its not really done, my mom talked to my while i was writing it, and it got me out of the "groove" *shakes fist in direction of mother*
    well here it is (i think its crap..... but i dunno, no one has read it yet, so they havent critised yet...)

    lost inside, and no one can find me
    all alone, trapped from the beginning
    the shock has percieved
    yet none in affect
    crying for my life
    but only dead hear me

    wishing for it to cease
    wishing for a break
    hurt inside
    i am the dead, unhealing

    the rocky path
    and winding streets
    was chosen for me
    i'm not ready
    striving for feat
    but tumble, tumble in my deceat

    yelling for peace
    none come for my release
    hurt inside
    i am the dead, unhealing

    so what do you guys think??????? if only i wasnt distracted from my mom, i could have done much better!
     

Share This Page