Never

You say we’re friends, but then tell me I’m nothing
That in your eyes I can’t be something
I’ll always be another excuse to get hurt
Do you know how it feels to have your love tell you your dirt?
“I’m never happy, but that’s not your fault”
You make the wound then throw in the salt
I’ll never make you happy; I’ll never be enough
Never, never, never. It hurts so much.
Five letters depicting the loss of hope
Two syllables with which I cannot cope
And you refuse to trust me, say like everyone else
That I’ll leave, only care about myself
I may not be perfect, I may let you down
But at least you would’ve gotten off the ground
And as despite your beliefs, I care about you
As do countless others, I’m sure that’s true
It appears your trust was shattered, previous events in time
But your heart could be fixed if you’d let it be mine
Confide in me, trust me, love me- I ask for nothing new
Why can’t you see something in me when I see so much in you?

If you would share with me all of your pain
I would be honoured bear it in your name
Just let me know all of your fears
And I will gladly cry all your tears
If you let me live inside your heart
I will make sure we do not part
Pour all your problems into myself
I’ll carve your scars into my health
Let me stand between you and your foe
I’ll act as a shield from any blow
And when my bones are broken and my flesh is torn
When my spirit’s bruised and my soul is worn
I’ll strive for a way to express my gratitude
Because you gave me a reason to change my attitude
And at the end of it all my sole sorrow
Is that I couldn’t be there for you tomorrow
So if you’d simply give me the chance
I could pull you out from this trance
I beg of you- claim me for your own
Then you will never be alone

 

Brilliant man
great aspecially

 

Thanks.

 

excellent!!!! (no other word could describe it). Well Done!!!

 

Well well well done.

 

Thanks a lot guys. No critisisms?

 

Beautiful, you rhyme very well. There was one error, however.

Otherwise, great.

 

Thanks.

 

This is great, and I like the ryhmes. Yours almost never seems forced.

 

Thanks. I try to avoid forced rhyming. Usually it results in quite symplistic one-syllable rhymes, but at least it feels for natural.

 

how do you get to rhyme so well?
i think the point has been brought out brilliantly, and you've kept constant throughout the lenght of the poem. the strenght of the poem has been reduced though. your poems are usually very strong..
admire the way you used "never" in the last line.
great work!

 

Thanks. Odd how you found this one weaker in strength, as I thought it was one of my stronger one emotionally. Thanks though.