One More Chance

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    a life in ashes

    a life in ashes mercury summer

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    One More Chance

    So you spit me out,
    When will this begin,
    The darkened words I shout,
    Hear these words I scream,
    Just give me one more chance,
    To hear my fears I dream,
    Of a chance to open up my eyes,
    This nature to survive,

    The seams are ripped and I'm way past bleeding,
    My heart is dead and there's no more feeling,

    Fire in the skies tonight,
    Open up and hear me,
    Give me one more chance.


    ...thoughts please...
     
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    Arhaz

    Arhaz ...waiting. LPA Super Member

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    it's neat. not too blurred. sufficient words for a short poem. overall, good job!
     

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