ok this is the Prolouge of the story...read it if you want and if I get good replies, Ill post the first chapter, and im currently working on Chapter 2 Sinister Prolouge In the shards of the Gem of Immortality, broken in the end of the War of Mondain, there was a shard named Chesapeake. In the shard, the world of Britannia was split into two facets. Trammel, the world of peace and prosperity, and its alternate dimension, Felucca. Felucca was a land of chaos and endless war, filled with evil creatures and murderers. In Felucca, there was a pirate city known as Buccaneer's Den, or Buc's Den as it was known by the locals. It's most popular point was its tavern, filled with pirates, theives, and mostly all outcasts of society.....a place perfect for beings of evil to claim for their own. One evening in Buc's Den, two men, covered in dark shrouds with powerful armor underneath, walked into the tavern side by side. One man had armor as black as the night, the other with armor a gleaming silver. They stood back to back, both drawing their fire red scimitars. The Man with Silver Armor turned his head slightly and said to his ally, "Remember what Mardoth said. Never look into your victims eyes when you take their lives." The Man with Black Armor nodded slowly, while the pirates in the tavern looked at them with disgust, for they were appalled that their lives were being threatened. One pirate stood up and ran toward the Man with Silver Armor and without looking, the Man impaled the pirate with his scimtar. He pulled out the sword quickly, letting the dead man fall to the floor, blood pouring onto the floor. The other pirates scattered quickly to get out, but before any of them could leave, the two warriors pounced and slaughtered everyone. As the two men were leaving, a hiding pirate accidently knocked a mug of beer off of the table where he was hiding near. The two turned quickly, and the Man in Silver said, "I will let you take this last victim." The Man in Black walked over and grabbed the pirate by the collar of his shirt, then dropped the man. The Man in Silver squinted a bit, and walked out, for he knew that his partner had looked into the eyes of his victim, rejuvenating the slowly decaying conscience of the Necromancers. The Man in Black kneeled there and put his hands over his face as the night faded.
Not bad...not bad. Its good to see a fan-fiction on here for once... (I'm actually writing a sort of fan-fiction as we speak ) Anyhow, this has already got me asking questions. "Who are they", "What are they?" ect...its definately something that I'll want to read on. The descriptions you've used are pretty good as well. Not too many, yet not too little. Good job mate...Good job...