test I’m asleep every night in the hollowness of every mistake, I’m tied to every moment staring, back into every blank space, I’m awake to every truth that I know holds no good for me, I’m shallow, dying, torn alone for this ungrateful world to see. On the edge, I hold on to no good apart from the evil intentions locked inside, The depth of the situation easily seen from the place in my mind where I reside. Contemplate to no good, no faculty can help, The power is within you, you alone can save, The secrets of your mind engraved behind these chains and belts, You alone can feel the need, you alone can crave. Justify against the truth for it has forbidden for you to lie, Justify for the emotions inside your body, the Truth shan’t be bribed. Over run the consequences, giving up hope, it’s despair, Clutch and hold tight the fears that leave you shadowed, for they alone shall care. tell me people, what you think...
I really liked this, it's really good! It's a cool new way, even though I'm not sure if it's completely new for you or any others... I haven't been on the site for a while now... So... My bad. But this is a really good example of mixing patterns, seeing as the rhyming scheme changes quite a bit. -grins- Keep writing the goods.. Cheers
WOW! I loved it, absolutely amazing. I don't know what it is about it exactly that just gives it such flow and a great level of intecity. For me, this is one of your bests, i just really like it, great job
i'm sorry i never thanked you guys....a lot grateful...it's great for people to spare sometime and actually check out my poems....thanks a lot