I realize this is cliche and pretty crappy, with no flow or rythem. I wanted to try it out though, so comment please. Truth Amongst Lies I love you Cliché words that have been recycled until all meaning has been milked out of them And as the meaning fades, the pain rushes in Hatred for myself, hatred for others, hatred for everything Everything but you I try to forget about you but only forget myself Lost in your eyes, the pain is melted down Trapped in your gaze as this liquid enters my veins Boiling my blood and setting my heart on fire You look away and my heart collapses under its own weight Nothing left to hold it up, the ashes are tossed around my mind Sprinkling pathetic wishes on every thought, ash-white snow settles in every crevice And the pain is cooled, frozen, solidified Trapping my thoughts in a numbing stasis An emotional paralysis, I can’t pull away from you When everything goes more wrong than I could ever imagine When the memory of hope is but a burnt out star concealed behind a veil of clouds greyer than the world When an eternity of cold, lifeless nothingness is favourable to waking up in the morning The thought of you drags me so far down I fall through the roof I keep crashing down but at least I’m moving And even if the pain hurts at least I can feel it Slice me open with your smile because it makes me feel real Cut me away from all of the superficial bullshit that surrounds me Away from all the judgements and the stereotypes and the lies Lift me above it all, just to drop me back in Kill me with your brutal honesty Watch me fall to pieces in your shadow Step away and let the sun peel the flesh from my bones Leave me as a pile of dust to be tossed around by the wind I hate you If only it were true http://esaul17.sitesled.com/I love you.htm
It's not crappy. A poem doesn't necessarily need rhythm to flourish, and this one is no different. You have a very beautiful way with words.