Uncertainty (Send Me The Right Words)

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    _Shifter_

    _Shifter_ Well-Known Member

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    Hey guys,
    I just want to present my first "real" song text to you and especially all the native English speakers. I wrote it some weeks ago and it would be nice to receive some feedback. The text called 'Uncertainty (Send Me The Right Words)' deals with the loss of a beloved person and/or a broken relationship. What do you think about it?
    Thanks in advance!


    Verse I:
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    As I'm lying on the floor
    I'm glancing out the windows
    Starring at whipping rain
    Dripping down like my tears
    These days life feels empty
    Uncertainty swallows me
    Everything was in vain
    And I can't let go


    Verse II:
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    The vault has darkened fast
    Protected by low clouds
    Will I ever see you shine
    A phrase burned into my mind
    Emotions evoked by the sounds
    Of dazing loneliness
    They claim they tried everything
    But you won't rise from the dead


    Chorus:
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    And everything I felt was
    - Just so real
    I wish I could kiss the sleep
    - From your eyes
    You turned into ashes and I
    Hope you aren't gone forever
    I wish you would send me
    - The right words


    Verse III:
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    I excused a hundred wars waged
    Since our roads did separate
    Tell me what am I living for
    Is it wise to follow you
    I still recall every single day
    Thought we'd smile in eternity
    Shall I just cut out this stone
    And throw my grief far away


    Final Chorus:
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    And everything I felt was
    - Just so real
    I wish I could kiss the sleep
    - From your eyes
    The pendulum stands still
    My memories keep on fading
    I wish you would send me
    - The right words
     
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    The Emptiness Machine

    The Emptiness Machine Out of the abyss. LPA Über VIP

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    I LOVE the chorus.
     

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