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    whoneedssubtext?

    whoneedssubtext? gggg-uNOT

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    This is basically a very rough draft that I wrote today when I was feeling down.
    It took 5 minutes to write, but criticism is welcomed. I'm not even sure what genre it is yet though.


    Why'd it have to go so far?
    (My thoughts racing, I can't keep up)
    Memories buried under the weight of it all.
    waiting for the one call,
    and all in all, I broke the wall.

    Warm summer days, led way to cold summer nights
    Outside your window, looking up at the light
    I can't hold on forever, but I'll try.
    They choice was never easy.
    Please don't cry


    What have you done to me.
    I don't cry, I just don't.
    What do you want me to be
    I can change, Please let me change

    The warm day fades into a dark night sky
    I'm still here, waiting for an answer.
    Don't keep me waiting, goddamn don't lie.
    I see the sweat dripping down your brow,

    I know it's coming, as your lip trembles
    Your hands start to shake.
    And I know, it's already here.
    This can't be goodbye.
     
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    Daniel

    Daniel Run for your life. LPA Super Member

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    I like it. Good work man.
     
    Last edited: Jan 17, 2007

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