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Discussion in 'Your Projects' started by Seinfeld, Jan 19, 2007.

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    Seinfeld

    Seinfeld We are the nobodies LPA Super Member

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    Just an idea I had...not sure if it's finished quite yet...

    Vocal:

    I don't wanna hear one more word
    'cause if it isn't "I love you"
    then it's just gonna hurt

    I'd rather be beaten to death
    than be abused by your words
    and always remember the scars that they left

    I'm pouring my heart into another melting pot
    along with your screams , your glares and hate to keep it hot

    If you wanna leave then go ahead
    just don't stand there telling me
    who all will end up in your bed

    And when you're finally gone
    please don't try to claw your way back
    like the piercing tunes of your seductive song

    I'm pouring my heart into another melting pot
    along with your screams , your glares and hate to keep it hot

    Please...just go
    just go

    Please...do know
    do know

    I am...all broke
    so alone...



    hope someone likes it for now...^_^
     
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    esaul17

    esaul17 antichrist

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    The first verse, you it sounds off when you have "word" in singular form, but then say the next word should be "I love you". I think you should have made the word "word" plural.

    Overall, it is a bit rough around the edges. so you can really tell it's a work in progress. I like the main idea though.

    And hello cyclops :p
     

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